Paper Revision

     After reading all of my comments on all of my papers, I have chosen to revise my research paper. I chose this because I feel that even though I easily met the length requirement, I could expand my paper and include even more information about the growth of the MLS. After reading the comments on the final draft of my research paper, I know where I can improve my paper to add more information effectively. Of course I'll fix all of the surface errors that are left.

     The two traits that I'm going to focus on in my revision are organization and word choice. I thought that I had organized my paper in a pretty good way last time, but I bet there's a better way of organizing it now that I can look back on the paper. By having a better organization, my audience should have a better understanding of what is going on.

     My word choice in this paper was average. There was nothing special about my word choice. My goal is to have a noticeably better word choice in my paper. The improved word choice in my paper should help to get my point across more accurately. By looking for these two traits, I am giving myself the opportunity to improve my paper the most.